poem/rhyming verses

[streetsoldier707]

i was bored last year...i kinda saved this , it was for this girl, i was having problems with cuz of shit that happened, but now as a matter of fact, everything is going great now, after a year of not talking lmao, but im very happy, she's happy, etc etc. Well here it is....:::


Verse 1:
I feel like ive seen to much suffer, I got this one lover who I loved just as my mother, Never did anything to hurt ya, we dont get along the same, I can never say the name that’s deep inside of my brain, I never overcame the fear and the pain, that I always felt when I thought about, someone new, always trying to bring you down, but like they say, what goes around, comes around, sometimes that dont make me feel any better, it just makes my eyes more redder, after the tears that are drowning me, I always see people frowning upon me, I dont hate or love it, sometimes, I wanna walk away from it, I seem to be stuck in this collision otherwise its my division from the girl who I thought was a heavenly vision, my mind dont wanna envision the position that im facing, nobody would believe it, I cant find a way to beat it. Im not crazy or insane, its just this one name, that ill never forget, until I get her, ill never see my regret.

Verse 2
Ive ****ed things up from the start, im just trying to express myself from my heart, baby I don’t know where your coming from, sometimes I feel like I wanna run, I don’t know what to do, baby im just trying to love you, I need a girl like you to be happy for, I don’t wanna feel like shit anymore, I think of the past day and night, I try not to see the dark, but see the light, I know what was wrong and what was right, sometimes I feel like I gotta fight for you, im just trying to pursue, a solution for us 2, I don’t wanna expose what I put myself through, I say no to myself cause I know its wrong, but now im being positive by writing these songs, im dedicating every line, every word every rhyme, all the time, just for you, to show I don’t want anyone else but you baby, but maybe sometimes that cant be, in reality, but not to me, I want to make this work for the best, im not like the rest, im not saying im the best, please baby make this work for me again, once again ill be the true best friend.

Verse 3
You know id run a shit load of miles, just to see you smile, babe this is my new kind of style, im trying to change in every way I can, and by doing this im not asking for a helping hand, I gotta do this myself I gotta be a man, not a little boy, that sits around and plays with his toys, I gotta be tough, I know its gonna be rough, but that’s definition of love, all the shit im doin, is maybe just for a hug, a lot of other people wouldn’t do what im gonna do, there’s no word for all the care that I got for you, that was the truth between us two, I cant go into the future without cleaning the past, what’s been passed on, that’s all ive asked, ill never feel the same when I asked you last, im sorry for you always being so mad, I feel like I should get outta your life for good to, but im still doing all that I could to...





Comments?

[Arc]

thats pretty good man 7/10, girl musta ment alot to you

[streetsoldier707]

Thank you...she really did, it hurt when she told me to never talk to her again, and then after a month, I knew she would'nt come back, then 10 month's later, she IM's me saying, how she was sorry for being a **** up and this and that, so now, were very good freind's again, and it feels great...But anyone got any other comment's or can relate to my song/poem in any way? Or even you own poems?

[Arc]

thats sucks man, ive had many relationships like that, glad to hear that your friends again though