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    Default Poem: The Darkness

    All I see are lies, they hold no truth.
    All I see is shadows, shadows of life.
    Now I feel my soul, wooded and crying.
    Seething with passion, I hold its hand.
    Falling from grace, I can hardly stay standing.
    But I must, for it is my duty.
    Stand high and proud form all to see.
    For any sigh of weakness, means I will fall.

    I feel anathema to this world.
    I feel as tho I shouldn’t belong.
    All I can do, is help who I can.
    For I can be strong for everyone.

    All I see are your lies.
    All I see is your false life.
    What you are I do not know.
    As long you haunt me, I shall stand.
    For it is what I must do.
    Because I am the only one who is able.

    You give me nightmares, and madness.
    You show me my failings.
    Not any longer, for I won’t let you.
    Get out of my life, I need you to leave.
    If you do not, I will make you.
    For you have no power over me.

    All I see is truth, shining and pure.
    All I see is life, brilliant with passion.
    Now I see my soul, joyous and happy.
    But you are still here, in all of your darkness.
    Still here, to remind me of my sins.
    I am glad that you are still with me.
    Because, it means that I am still humble.

    I hope you never leave.

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    Excellent prose style writing. To convey strong emotions and passion it is not always a requirement that the verses rhyme. The point of poetry is to get accross to the reader the depth of the writers feelings. This sir you did very well.I took it as wanting to rid the pain,but not the lesson learned.A soul tortured,a heart broken,but a lesson learned you do not wish to forget.
    This is what the poem conveyed to me...others might see it a bit differently,however,for myself this is what it was saying.


    A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning...

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    Thank you. I take much pride in your complament.

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    nice..gives me the chills
    Last edited by PoTatoes; 09-08-2006 at 10:46 AM.

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    Cool poem, I liked it a lot.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Frai7ty
    Thank you. I take much pride in your complament.
    You are very welcome. The compliment was meant,and the poetry was excellent.Please keep it coming!


    A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning...

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