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    Default Poem: My promise

    My Promise
    I'm here for you
    To help you through.
    To hold you.
    To be with you.

    I need to.
    Culture a cure.
    To mend your hart, and dreams.
    To show you what love truly means.

    I'll never run away.
    I'll be sure to stay.
    And all I can do is pray.
    For you to feel the same.

    And If your even in pain.
    I will be there to kiss it all away.
    And make you feel better again.
    This is my promise to you.


    I wrote this a long time ago. So sorry if it's a bit newbish. Any who, hope you all enjoy. :)

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    A Noob in your Darkness Pamela's Avatar
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    I did ^^ It came from the heart...you can tell.


    A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning...

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    Well thx Pam. Your appreciation is welcome as always.

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    That poem to me is Deep.

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    I ain't really into poetry, and I accidentally clicked here but...wow. very nice

    Thanks FrogMan for the Sig!

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    Nice poem but, after reading so many poems that people and my friends make because their in love, these poems are just too identical.

    Heres a guys info on my buddy list on aim. He says he wrote it himself.

    What if i'm always there when you need me
    Will you even care
    What if i promise to forever care
    Will you need me

    What if i tell you that your my only
    Will you love me
    What if i really want a chance with you
    Will you let me

    That was just a small part, and it uses repetition throughout. lol.

    I'm just saying after a hundred poems love poems need a little more twist in it for it to be anymore interesting.
    Please add to my Reputation if you find my post reasonable, beneficial, or helpful. Thanks. =]

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    Well thanks Kaze, I like it when people give me honest feedback. Bare in mind tho this was the *Count on Fingers* 3rd poem. It's bound to be rough around the edges. Still tho, thanks :)

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