05-26-2006, 05:39 PM
I just made this story for English class for some extra credits. Its late so it might not be very good and i would like to here what you think lol. It is about an ant making a big travel at my school and the passing bells rings and such.
"Gramps can you tell me a story?" asked Bobby the baby ant.
"Yes but let me refresh my memory," said Gramps.
"What is this story going to be about?"
"A long adventure I took a very long time ago," replied Gramps, "I was just a young
ant just leaving your great grandmothers. It all started when I decided to leave my
mothers den. I was young, fit, and full of life and ready to see the world and have
adventures."
"Are we going into a flashback?" asked Bobby.
"Yes here we go."
As I climbed out of the hole there was a blinding light showing down from the heavens.
I shielded my eyes just enough so I can see where I was going. There was a forest of
tall green plants and I knew that just beyond it is an adventure waiting to be taken. I
fought my way through the fighting forest. It was as if it didn’t want me to get through
it. I saw a rock in the distance and decided to see what was on top and what was
around me. I got to the rock out of breath and peered in the distance. There were
giant boxes and more forest everywhere. There was also long patches of what
seemed to be desert filled with black marks and dents everywhere.
Then an extremely loud sound came into the air: "BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP," it went. All of
the sudden giant creatures started piling out of these boxes very quickly. There must
have been a thousand of them all making loud noises I could not understand. They
disappeared within 10 minutes. There were still some wondering around. They must
have been scouts for there colony. I climbed down the rock and proceeded my way
through the forest and came to one of these deserts. I rested before I went across it
incase there was no food or water and the giants came back. I made my way across
the barren desserts to find a giant canyon I had to overcome. It stretched far in the
horizon and there was no way to go around it. I sat there trying to figure out how I am
going to get over it. "BEEEEEEEEEEEEP," it had happened again. The monsters
swarmed out of there hives like bees in a frenzy. I jumped and dodges to avoid there
crushing blows if their feet. But, when I thought I was alright, it happened in a flash. A
giant shadow appeared under me and I looked up to see a giant’s foot coming down
into me. Luckily, I landed in a ridge in it and it carried me over the giant canyon. I
came down with a crash and ran to safety. It was not over here. A giant spider came
out from the forest and grabbed me and...
"I think it is time to stop here," said Gramps.
"Nooo please don’t stop its just getting exiting!" exclaimed Bobby.
"Im old, I need my rest maybe we will finish this another time. Now go to sleep," I
finished and my word was final.
The Great Travel
"Gramps can you tell me a story?" asked Bobby the baby ant.
"Yes but let me refresh my memory," said Gramps.
"What is this story going to be about?"
"A long adventure I took a very long time ago," replied Gramps, "I was just a young
ant just leaving your great grandmothers. It all started when I decided to leave my
mothers den. I was young, fit, and full of life and ready to see the world and have
adventures."
"Are we going into a flashback?" asked Bobby.
"Yes here we go."
As I climbed out of the hole there was a blinding light showing down from the heavens.
I shielded my eyes just enough so I can see where I was going. There was a forest of
tall green plants and I knew that just beyond it is an adventure waiting to be taken. I
fought my way through the fighting forest. It was as if it didn’t want me to get through
it. I saw a rock in the distance and decided to see what was on top and what was
around me. I got to the rock out of breath and peered in the distance. There were
giant boxes and more forest everywhere. There was also long patches of what
seemed to be desert filled with black marks and dents everywhere.
Then an extremely loud sound came into the air: "BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP," it went. All of
the sudden giant creatures started piling out of these boxes very quickly. There must
have been a thousand of them all making loud noises I could not understand. They
disappeared within 10 minutes. There were still some wondering around. They must
have been scouts for there colony. I climbed down the rock and proceeded my way
through the forest and came to one of these deserts. I rested before I went across it
incase there was no food or water and the giants came back. I made my way across
the barren desserts to find a giant canyon I had to overcome. It stretched far in the
horizon and there was no way to go around it. I sat there trying to figure out how I am
going to get over it. "BEEEEEEEEEEEEP," it had happened again. The monsters
swarmed out of there hives like bees in a frenzy. I jumped and dodges to avoid there
crushing blows if their feet. But, when I thought I was alright, it happened in a flash. A
giant shadow appeared under me and I looked up to see a giant’s foot coming down
into me. Luckily, I landed in a ridge in it and it carried me over the giant canyon. I
came down with a crash and ran to safety. It was not over here. A giant spider came
out from the forest and grabbed me and...
"I think it is time to stop here," said Gramps.
"Nooo please don’t stop its just getting exiting!" exclaimed Bobby.
"Im old, I need my rest maybe we will finish this another time. Now go to sleep," I
finished and my word was final.