[short story] Untitled

[PantallicA]

I just wanted to say that part of this story was inspired by Jedi, and I in no way take credit for any of it. I needed to write something for my english class, and his story was fresh in my mind. Here it is.

Raelik gripped his buckler as he cautiously proceeded through the dark cave known as the Den of Evil. The high priestess of the rogue's camp, Akara, had asked him to kill all of the creatures that inhabited the cave, for she feared that the monsters were planning an attack on their makeshift camp. Raelik's magical buckler produced a glowing light, allowing his eyes to pierce the dark shroud inside the cave. He continued walking, until he came upon his first battle. Three blood-red monsters emerged from the dark mist, each wielding no more than a rusty scimitar.

One of the demons lunged at Raelik, but he quickly retaliated by delivering a hard blow with his hand axe. The attacker was wounded, but still able to slice Raelik's leg with his deadly weapon. Raelik grimaced, and smashed his shield into the skull of the unlucky demon, killing him on impact. The other two demons shrieked and ran off into the darkness at the sight of their fallen friend, but Raelik leaped onto them; and severed both of their heads with his axe. Feeling weary and sick, he drank a potion to counteract any infection that the rusty blade may have given him. He drank another potion, to relieve himself of fatigue and pain - he was now ready to fight.

Raelik looted the fallen enemies' corpses. He found a magical amulet and a few gold pieces, all of them probably stolen from the graves of the rich, deceased rogues. In an effort to activate the amulet, he untied the leathery crimson bow that tied his scroll of identify closed; and began to read the cryptic spell, and the amulet began to glow. He put the amulet aroud his neck, and it began to glow. The glow covered his whole body, making him feel stronger. His axe now had a red aura around it, which perplexed Raelik. He wandered further into the darkness, until he found a gathering of zombies.

Raelik attacked the zombies with such ferocity that even the great Talic coult not match. He ripped through the festering zombies, leaving their rotting body parts strewn across the cold, cave floor. Whenever Raelik struck a zombie, they would catch fire. He figured that this must have been the work of the aura on his hand axe, and continued killing the disease corpses, until he reached the leader, Corpsefire.

Raelik quickly chugged a potion to rejuvenate him, and he leapt at Corpsefire. The zombie fought back with a punch to Raelik's shield, shattering it instantly. Raelik picked up a short sword, and began senselessly attacking Corpsefire. The battle lasted for what seemed like hours, with the two enemies extremely tired and close to death. Another demon came running out of the shadows, and attacked Raelik. He swung his sword at the demon, slicing his throat wide open. This inspired Raelik to use the short sword more often than his axe, and he swung at Corpsefire, severing his arm. Stunned, Corpsefire could do nothing but fall to his knees and concede defeat. Raelik then took his chance, and severed the powerful zombie's head.

He walked through the hallowed passageways of the cave once more, making sure that the cave had been ridden of its evil. Satisfied with his work, Raelik went back to the rogue's camp to recieve his reward from Akara. As she bandaged his many wounds, she told him about how much everyone in the camp thanked him, and she blessed him with his use of his sword. Confused, he walked to the campfire and made small talk with Warriv, the trader. Raelik fell asleep for a few hours, before being woken up by Kashya, the rogue's battle leader. She congratulated him on his brave efforts in the Den, and told him she had another quest for him. He would have to venture off into the Cold Plains, find the rogue's cemetary, and kill Blood Raven, who was raising the dead to join her army.

Raelik accepted, and went back to sleep. He had a long day ahead of him.

I hope you liked it, please help me title it. Also, point out any spelling or grammatical errors you see. I was typing it as I had it written in my rough draft and it may not be all right. Thanks again!

[Aemaeth]

Thats realy good dude. Ill think about a title.

[PantallicA]

Thanks. It's due in a few hours, so if someone could think of a title, that'd be awesome.

[Aemaeth]

Cleansing?

Just a quick idea.

[PantallicA]

That would do the trick. =D Rep for you.

[:[.:/King\:.]:]

Thats not realy a story... well yeah it is but it is like diablo

[Foog]

great story. you write very well. let us know what your teach thinks of it?