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Post Apocalypto: Savior
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"But Christ being come an high priest of good things to come, by a greater and more perfect tabernacle, not made with his hands, that is to say, not of this building. . . so Christ was once offered to bear the sins of the many; and unto them that look for him shall he appear the second time without sin unto salvation."
Hebrews 9:11,28

It is unknown to most as to what truly scarred the world, although there are many theories and superstitions as to what had occurred, but the truth is simpler than any of them. Humanity's greatest fear of the twenty first century had come to pass. Nuclear holocaust struck the world, and its utter destructive force was more terrible than any could have imagined.

There lays, in the center of the world, a great crack, a chasm of unimaginable proportions, a permanent reminder. Severing the left portion of the top of what was Africa from the rest, and grazing the rest of the continent along its coast bordering the Atlantic Ocean. It is hypothesized, though none dare travel far enough north to prove it, that it also slices straight through what was Europe and possibly even what was the North Pole as well.

What was. Those two words are used much more often than they used to be. Their most common place is before the names of old countries, cities, seas, continents, and the like. After the world fell down, what was described most things that people had come to know and take for granted. What was could no longer ever be.

The northlands are balls of ice, too cold for even the most stubborn of creatures to reside. Drastically to the contrary, Antarctica has become a sanctuary, what could almost be called a paradise of very little poor weather. Paradise...all hope or meaning to that world had long been lost. As the world fell down, many words' meanings had been lost.

Fossil fuels are a thing of the past. Most have never heard of them. Running water is a luxury that none can afford. Firearms have become rarities that are to be treasured, not used on a regular basis. Humanity has degraded to a state of primitive beginnings, scarcely above the cave men of oh so long ago.

How long ago is no longer known. Years have long ceased to hold any importance, and have been forgotten, months as well. Only the seasons and the time of day are known, vaguely. Even time has boiled down to morning, afternoon, and night. Numbers aren't used.

Most religious scholars would have thought that after the apocalypse, humanity, or what was left of it, would have learned from their mistakes. Well, religious scholars could have learned a lot from pragmatism. The land of Antarctica, now known as Malapropos for reasons that its occupants have long forgotten, is war torn and filled with death. Chaos is rampant. An anarchist's dream world.

The last bastion of the old world is religion, of which only one has survived, flourished, even. Yes, Christianity is the widely accepted truth, but the people of Malapropos take on a much more cynical view of the religion than even the most avowed of the Catholics. And in a world such as the one they live in, who can blame them?

The common opinion is that God has abandoned them, grown tired of their petty little lives, even been angered by their abundant flaws. Many even believe that it was the Lord himself who scarred the Earth, not in an attempt to wipe them out but to make them suffer even more than they already did day by day.

Still, most pray for forgiveness, forgiveness they know shall never come. Forgiveness they know shall fall upon deaf ears, if even any ears at all. Churches are still a place of sanctuary, for the most part. It should probably be said instead, people have a better chance of not being slaughtered in churches than anywhere else, which says much after the world fell down.

After the world fell down...can humanity pick up the pieces?

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#2
Beside a few grammatical problems I have found that is an overall well written piece. Do you hope to turn it into an on going story or are you just writing a prolouge? I am interested in seeing the rest.
"One murder makes a villain, millions a hero. "
- Beilby Porteus, Death, A Poem
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#3
I'm hoping to turn it into a story, but that all depends on how well its recieved. Forgive me for not spell checking, I forgot...:confused:
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#4
Thats great. I think it will be well recieved. I have my own little story going right now also called "Truely Fallen Angels". Its a more loosely based apocolypse story involving 49 fallen angles who got to keep their wings but are also the ones who will bring about the coming of Lucifer or change humanity for the better. Give it a look. There will most likely be another update tonight once I finish section two here. Section three of chapter one will be up twomorrow night hopefully.
"One murder makes a villain, millions a hero. "
- Beilby Porteus, Death, A Poem
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#5
I read a bit of the beginning of your story before I started posting here. I enjoyed what I read. I'll probably read the rest pretty soon, but I'm still getting settled.
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#6
sinner's story is very good, and yours looks promising, you do a graet job of painting a picture of a desolate world.
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