500 point contest

[PoTatoes]

Sorry mods if i posted in an incorrect forum, i just thought that this would fit under writing well .

Anyways the contest is to write the best presidential speech (my nephew's running for president at his middleschool so yah he asked if i could get him one and yah ). The best speech will get you 500 points that you can spend at will. Remember its a middleschool presidential election so please no profanity and keep it clean. Try to keep it under 2 minutes so no 300000paragraph speechs.

This is the first contest im writing, so please suggest or give me constructive critism. Ill try to raise the point prize a bit more next time when i get get more. Im not a mod so i cant really get that man points

Fire away!!!!

[Mushroomhead18nc]

ummm, sry if this is wrong section, but ur goin about this the wrong way man. People dont want to get on the computer to write up a speech, thats what school is for. also people dont really want to write a speech for only 500points. Try to think up something fun to catch peoples eye

[PoTatoes]

give me constructive critism.

mushroom please, if you have a suggestion please pm me, posting is only for contest particpants (if there are any -_-)

[FraterPerdurabo]

500 points really isn't much. If you want, I can add in another 3000 or so, if it helps people write it. I can give more as well.

[PantallicA]

I'll throw in whatever points I have, as well.

[xqs_me]

ill throw in 1k too, it won't let me buy anything anyways

[wm_hunter]

I will throw in 2k. Please respond if you would like the donation.

[PoTatoes]

all donations would would be gratefully accepted. would 5k points sound like a goodass grandprize and a possible 1k as a 2nd place prize?

i have

Points: 773.47
Bank: 4,030.74
Total Points: 4,804.21

just incase if you guys think ill take the points and use them for myself

[wm_hunter]

I have donated 3000 for the contest. He now has 3,783.47 with 4,030.74 in bank

[xqs_me]

I donated my 1k. He now has 4,783.47 and 4,030.74 in bank

[John]

Good evening, i am running for president and i would like to present you with my thoughts and feelings towards being your president. I want to start by saying, i know the others running have some good points, but i think i can proove that i am the best candidate. Ever since i was very young, i have been trying to help people with their problems, and usually i was successful. I try my best to get a job done, even if i have to spend 20+ hours with no overtime. I like knowing that i am making progress while doing anything. I want to improve the quality of our school. This can be done by holding fund raising events, and maybe we can even purchase afew new computers for the computer lab. I would like to have the school connected with a high speed comcast connection. I would also like to have video confrencing capabilities, and we could work on group projects with other school's throughout the world. I have heard various complaints on the lunches served, and im currently seeking a solution. Afew of the teachers have been doing a less than acceptable job, and i think we can seek out some better group of educational advisors. I would also like to improve upon the after school programs. Alot of students cannot get a ride home until maybe an hour after school ends. I believe we should provide them with activities to keep them off of the street, even if for only an hour. I hope my thoughts were clear and concise, and please vote for me.

This is the speech i have written for you, i hope you like it.

[PoTatoes]

mods close this

new link : http://www.blizzsector.co/writing-role-playing/37022-presidential-speech-contest-prizes.html#post393922

if you would like me to add something in the thread tell me.

http://www.blizzsector.co/writing-role-playing/37022-presidential-speech-contest-prizes.html#post393922

use this link if the other one doesnt work for you

[Z3R0]

Wow, points really aren't important to me. Besides, most of the stuff in Vplaza is disabled anyway.