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Rain
#1
I'm not so sure about this one. I wrote it as it came to me, so it may not flow well.

Rain
Holding my soul inside.
I sit in the rain
and do noting but cry
and wait for her grace.

She woke me once
lost in that winter so deep.
Where is she now
have I finally pushed her away.

I am a fool.
For moving to fast
and pushing to hard
but I will stay.

I sit in the rain
prying for her
so she may love
once again... anyone.

I need her to be happy.
Even if I am not.
Her smile wake's my soul.
Even if it is for another....
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#2
It is a good poem simply because of the impact of the emotions it evokes.
I see longing and pain,but also love and hope.It speaks not only of where your heart is,but why.Very nice.

I am pretty sure I have posted my published poems,but if you would like I can re-post some.
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A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning...
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#3
It's not my favorite, but It is how I feel.
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#4
Still a good work and expression of your thoughts and feelings.
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