My Mind (Poem... ish like thing)

[Frai7ty]

These images in my head wont stay. The silhouettes of fading worlds from my dreams, will fade into the darkness of my mind so deep they will never gain the light they desire. The imagination granted to me flows so fast that even most amazing idea will soon drift away, taken adrift in the rapids of my mind. Oh how I wish to slow the pace, so I can share with others more adequately share the worlds in my mind's eye. Looks like this mood has once again left me, I hope you all gained at least a glimmer of wisdom from this, because this world has left.... and faded.

(Shoot, can someone move this to the Writing area, I put this in the wrong area by mistake)

[Pamela]

I can't anymore hun,but the thoughts in the writing were eloquent .

[schmidz]

very good but that was a little too much for me man...
but then again when i wrote something like that this is how it started:
I am stupid,
I am dumb,
when i think my brain goes numb.

[Zerobanshee]

i liked it, but it seemed lengthy.

[Pamela]

Desire Unfulfilled
Is there no rest for the troubled lonely heart?
No succor for the soul of a woman wanting?
How very long, in desperation, seeking now to start…
This sweet, and yet…bitter desire for love is haunting.
Trembling on the very edge of a dark abyss...
Clinging to the image of sweet loves warm embrace.
Wanting him more…desiring his tentative kiss…
Sweet thoughts of holding him…touching his face.
Wishing only to tell him of her love, sweet desire...
Somehow unable in clumsy words to convey………
How much her heart yearns to set his passion afire!
Lapsing into soul deep sadness, her heart stays
Longing always to spark desires flame in his eyes.
Shivering in response to his imagined feeling…
Her own body trembles….passionate thoughts arise.
He feels not the same ….leaving her heart reeling…
So with uncaring rejections job done…
She aches all alone…his heart not won…


Then try this poem...

[Frai7ty]

Good one, sad, but good.

Thanks to all who commented .

Yea this was a bit long compared to some of my other stuff, but in comparisons of other ones I've seen, it's small. I've seen some that where almost 2 pages, if not more.

[Skye]

I love it AJ, love it.

I did advanced english studies at school, and poetry was a part of it. We had to fish through poems that were up to 4 or 5 pages long and analyse them.

[Aemaeth]

I took the stone bowl
in both hands
and poured out my time
onto the ground
drowning hapless insects
feeding the we.e.d.s
untill the sun stood
looking down
and stole the rain

seeing in the vessel's cup
a thousand cracks
i looked back
the way i came
and saw a trail green
with memories lost
whoever made this bowl
was a fool, but the greater
he who carried it.

It wouldn't let me say w.e.e.d. for some reason.
so that explains the fullstops.

[Pamela]

Scott that was so sad.A hapless man seeming to wander..performing actions,yet affecting nothing good in his passing by...
If I interpret correctly...