Poem: Just Another Storm

[Z3R0]

It was good. However, when writing literature, you want to pick a theme or topic that people can relate to and that people want to read about. You did good with the wording, but there were grammatical errors. I know typos happen but some people ignore grammer and go by what they think sounds right. That doesn't always work. Look at this edit and tell me what you think. I'm not clowning your literary skills, I just trying to help, in the literary world, grammer is more important than feelings.

The shouts and the yelling,
Make me want to cry.
It makes me want to grow wings,
and teach myself to fly.

I want to escape this madness,
It’s just another storm.
Someday I know it will pass,
But somedays just seem too long.

My mother’s cries and my father’s hits,
Are driving me insane;
If I were to run from this,
Could I really hold the blame?

Escape is impossible,
It’s just another dream.
Another hope escaping
Through another rip in the seams.

To calm my aching worries,
To stop my long and painful cries;
I tell myself it's "just another storm",
Just one more that will pass on by.


If you do not like this, then ignore it. However, notice how much more smoothly this flows. the less words you can use in a line the better. It needs to flow, not be a mouthfull. It is a good poem, keep up the good work.