Foog's first poem ever

[Foog]

Dedicated to my lovely Brittany.

We fit together so well
That sometimes I wonder
If God did put me here for you,
To love you for eternity
And hold you in my arms.
How can I profess my love
If all I've got are words?
Nothing here on this poor Earth
Can ever share my passion.
Please, my dear, listen to me say
I love you now and always
So I give my heart to you alone
To keep for all of time.



please be kind, i've never written anything before.

[Dynafrom]

Nice poem, better then anything I can ever write.

[Foog]

thanks. that was just off of the top of my head, im on the phone with her and i thought about how much i love her..
*insert soppy sonnet here*

[Obfuscate]

I'm not trying to be mean but it "sounds" like a shakespearan love sonnet. Which is good. Just lacks the far reaching imagery that a good love sonnet should have. Need more metaphors and similies(SP?). Good for a first go though.

[Foog]

thanks

[Crown]

See if you can extend it any further. If you could, that's already a great start.

[Grave]

very nice poem i am very bad at poetry but you completely created it or you used some reference? just wondering i love the poem

[Foog]

let me point out that thgrave, your signature says thEgrave. just so you know, and its 2005...eh?

yeah, i made all of this up...heres the second half of it. is this final enough, sinner? thanks for all of your upcoming and pas topinions, guys.

Perfection doesn't begin to describe you,
You who so easily fills that void...
I know now what the only thing could be.
It's got to be love, it has to be that
As nothing else can do what you've done for me!
People tell me that I'm too young to love,
But I know inside that that cannot be true.
All it takes to see your love for me
Is to see you look deep into my eyes,
And empty your soul to me.
You've never done this for anyone before
So I know it's got to be special.
I guess what I'm trying to say
Is that I'm grateful God sent me to you
Because since the day we forged the bond...

I've never been the same.

[Grave]

let me point out that thgrave, your signature says thEgrave. just so you know, and its 2005...eh?

i know i have made this signature for gfxgamers site where my name is thegrave2005 dont worry its mine i have created it
about the 1/2 half it sounds like your desperate about this girl it is very nice compared to anything i have ever made. i should start poetry

[Foog]

i am quite desperate for her, just ask UGM. look at my user title >_< she's everything to me.

[Crown]

Pretty good foog, I like it. Definetly good for a first.

[liquidshaggy]

ha poem

[Foog]

Thanks crown.

shag, stop spamming. unless you've got something important to say, or something someone'd care about, dont post...

[erizoe]

I don;t particulary (i cant spell) like love poems but that was a great one. I can't write for sh!t so don't be offended

[AmourAffair]

That was a really good poem and is worthy of being published.

You better be effin proud of yourself.

[Foog]

you really think so? i just thought that up on the spur of the moment...thanks.

[AmourAffair]

you really think so? i just thought that up on the spur of the moment...thanks.

Yes, I do. I really think you did an awesome job on it and keep writing more "spur of the moment" kind of poems. You do good work, and you should definetly be proud of yourself, like I said before.

[Foog]

Thanks. I'll be back with more, if the urge hits me >_<

should i stick with arhyming? or should i try to rhyme them...

[liquidshaggy]

sry it's a good poem i think

[Foog]

why are you apologizing?