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Temptations (Poem)
#1
All of these temptations
Are drowning my judgment
And I cant seem to see
The other side of me

All I know is
That nothing is certain
Behind the velvet curtain
And that I need to wash this pain away

What do I do here
With all of my fear
Do I express them
or do I suppress them

I used to know these things
They used to be simple
Now I am changing
Or am I simply forsaking

The truth is always open
and I need to show them
That I know the way
And that I will stay
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#2
You can really get a sense of uncertainty.Almost as if the subject wants,yet can not have.A sense of yearning and perhaps indecision on how to go about satisfying needs.
just my take on it,and well written,good job!
[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]

A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning...
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#3
As soon as a saw the title read "temptations" and Pamela's name in the last to post, I just said "oh god".

Good poem though, nicely written.
As long as darkness flows through my veins, I will never cease, As long as my dreams still haunt me, I will never show mercy, and as long as evil lives I will never die.....
[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
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#4
Thanks to both of you. It was the only Poem I've written in a wile. Thought I would share it Wink. Glad you liked it.
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